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Clever and imaginitive, and I enjoyed the interactions between the characters.
I did spend some time being confused – probably because you were trying to disguise Avery’s exact nature to reveal at the climax. Unfortunately, trying to figure out whether he was a fish or a manatee or who knows what, and whether everyone else was kept pulling me out of teh story, but you had me hooked well enough that I kept diving back in.
You had me thinking at first the sacrifice would be something horrendous – living victims, and when Theresa showed up, I thought it would be her. The transplant idea was clever, and I liked the twist about the types of people the “donors” were. Part of me worries this is a mistake, that it will make the aliens more bloodthirsty, but they’re apparently over the edge already.
I wish you’d harvested the parts from suicide victims instead – then the aliens would kill themselves off.
Some potential here, and an emotional undercurrent. I would have liked a little more detail – how the fight started, who’s fighting using what, etc., to pull me in a little more. As is, only Father and Daliah know.
Well, that was a REAL cliffhanger! 😉 A shame that I already know she died from the first paragraph, or it would have been even more of a guaranteed page-turner.
Enjoying the story so far.
Well written, enjoyable read.
Without the cover photo I might have been lost (it’s hard to describe unknown future tech so the reader realizes it’s “ours.”) You gave enough hints about your POV character’s perspective that I understood his nature – surprised he didn’t know what a goblin was, especially with how close they are. Maybe that was the point…